Showing posts with label Eight Seconds. Show all posts
Showing posts with label Eight Seconds. Show all posts

Tuesday, February 27, 2018

Is there room for Western fiction in the New West?


As I’ve done a couple of times in the past year, I’m republishing some of my older short stories (which have already appeared in multiple paying publications) at this site. But while cross-genre Westerns ride strong in the saddle in contemporary settings such as romance and mystery, is there a place for a contemporary Western that’s just a straight-forward Western? An urban Western, perhaps? Today’s post, “Eight Seconds,” was a finalist in Western publisher Moonlight Mesa’s 2010 Cowboy Up contest and published in MMA’s March 2011 print volume, Award-Winning Tales. It was republished again that fall in Pulp Modern (Autumn 2011). Both are still available on Amazon, Moonlight Mesa's at a reasonable price. But the Pulp Modern paperback will set you back a cool $2,904, so why not try this story from the volume for free? It’s chock-full of classic Western elements – cowboys, Native Americans, and rodeos. What’s not to love?
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EIGHT SECONDS

The obituary comes in an envelope with no return address, just a Dallas postmark from a zip code near the Intertribal Center. I think at first it’s a plea for funds—“$20 puts food on the table for hungry Indians”—that kind of thing. I usually give a hundred. A hundred bucks isn’t much to me now and it quiets my conscience a little. I rip it open, feeling inside for a return envelope to put my contribution in, but there’s only the piece of newsprint, and I read, remembering what had happened to Jimmy Kotay.
***
Big Jimmy and Little Jimmy, they called us, but we were the same height and build, Little Jimmy maybe a shade slimmer. He had walked, late, into my class at Vista College.  That was my second try at physiology, and if I failed again, Ma could pack away the dream she had of me being anything but a cowboy or a drunk.
Little Jimmy was way past the five minutes the lecturer Samuels allowed everybody to finish a cigarette, take a leak, and grab a cup of sludge from the pot in the school secretary’s office, before sliding into their desks.
Samuels shoved his glasses to the top of his head to give Little Jimmy the full effect of his pale-eyed stare. “You must be Ghulam Jilani,” he said, looking from the newcomer to the class roll.
“Just Jilani,” Little Jimmy said.
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In his tweeds and tie, Little Jimmy seemed to have wandered into the wrong class. Except for Samuels in his stained lab coat, the rest of us looked like starving students—clothing ripped and faded, hair long and greasy, the men three days from a shave. Little Jimmy told me later he thought we were refugees, and he wondered what disaster had made us flee to a small town in Texas. He sat down by me, maybe because I looked the least unshaven. Not that I was a stickler for grooming—us Kiowas just aren’t much in the beard department.
“Why the hell are you so late?” I whispered.
He pursed his lips reprovingly. “I was deciding which tie to wear. I wanted to make a good impression.”
Except being a clotheshorse wasn’t the only reason for his lateness. Being late was as much a habit for Little Jimmy as being hung over was for me.
Only I didn’t learn that right away. That first day, he looked so neat and prim, his mustache barbered within an inch of its life, I choked on my coffee when he told me his dream. We were sitting over vending machine cups in the student center where he’d followed me. He talked and I tried to ignore him while the TV blared the theme to a rerun of “Bonanza.”
“My mother always wanted me to be a doctor,” he said.
“Yeah. Mine too.” I pulled out papers and a tobacco pouch to roll a smoke. 
“Of course, I won’t be able to break the news to her until I’m famous, but I’d like to do so before she hears about my exploits in the news.”

“Your exploits?” 
“My exploits as a cowboy.” 
“You gotta be kidding. You want to be a cowboy? Like me?” 
“I thought you were an Indian.” 
“I’m a cowboy and an Indian. I can play both parts in the Westerns. But if you got to pick sides, yeah, be a cowboy. At least cowboying earns a few bucks when somebody needs an extra hand.  There’s no pay in being an Indian.”
I tossed my cigarette butt in the last inch of cold coffee. Little Jimmy sat, very straight and quiet in his tweeds.
“You need money?” I asked. “You could try out for the school rodeo team. They give scholarships. That’s the only thing that’s keeping me here.”
“I have a scholarship from my country.” He turned back to “Bonanza.” I could tell he was sore about being laughed at.
“I can teach you, Jilani.”
“Teach me what?”
“To be a cowboy.”
He turned to look at me again and his face lit up like Christmas when he saw I wasn’t stringing him along. He held out his hand. “Call me Jimmy.”
***
I did roping, mostly, on the team, and some bronc riding. A few afternoons of working with Little Jimmy showed me he wouldn’t learn to rope that semester, maybe not that lifetime. But as a beginning bronc rider, he wasn’t bad. He was stronger than you’d think for a skinny kid and he had a natural rhythm for the ride. I tried him out in a few local rodeos. He insisted on using what he called his alias, although I couldn’t for the life of me figure out how his mother would ever hear about it.
“Try not to talk any more than you have to,” I told him. “That accent of yours is bad enough, but if this crowd thinks you’re a Muslim, they’ll go crazy. If anyone talks to you, say ‘no hablo ingles.’”
“What if they talk to me in Spanish?”
“There was a cowboy on the circuit once from a town called Iraan.” I said it the right way—Eye-Ruh-Ann. “When he was announced, they nearly booed him out of the arena. Thought he was Iranian.”
“I certainly do not want anyone to think I am Iranian,” Little Jimmy said.
He went by The Karachi Kid. Pakistan wasn’t in the news much back then and nobody knew where Karachi was. The unfamiliar name and his brown skin and me hanging out with him made everyone think he was Indian, too, in spite the hair on his upper lip. With a kidnapped white girl or two in my family tree, even I sported a stringy mustache.

Wednesday, November 17, 2010

Who's talking? And why should the past be perfect?

Let me make one thing clear up front:  those mysterious lights baffling pilots at D-FW International Airport this week were not lasers.  They were the sparks of glee I gave off when writing friend Robin Y. announced that, for the duration of NaNoWriMo, she was giving up first person and present tense.

Those of you who've tried it know that writing from a first person point of view -- letting a character, in all her shameless self-aggrandizement, tell her story straight to readers without letting them hear from other characters who could diss her -- is like running a marathon with arms tied behind your back.  Add writing in the present tense (think:  I go to the store) instead of the more common past tense (I went to the store) and you've got the equivalent of running in leg shackles.  It can be done.  Just don't expect to set any word count records.

Don't get me wrong -- there are wonderful reasons to use either a first person POV or present tense narrative.  First person is almost required for some genres, such as young adult, although the Harry Potter series stuck to third person and it seemed to do okay.  Harry Potter, of course, was a likeable kid.  Which brings up another major reason to write in first person -- making an unlikeable character palatable.  I used first person in my short story "Eight Seconds" to let a protagonist's questionable actions slide down, like a bitter dose sweetened with sugar.  Is that why it won a Western fiction contest prize?  Maybe, but I've also sold shadyside characters written in third person.

How about writing in present tense?  It's got video game-style immersion in the action to recommend it.  It also lets you write scenes that really are in the character's past in straight past tense instead of the cumbersome past perfect tense (I had gone to the store) that will get dings for slowing your narrative pace to a crawl.  But your inner editor will have to be turned to high, because present tense isn't how people usually talk.  And do you want an editor looking over your shoulder during NaNoWriMo?

Still insist you can't forego the intimacy of first person, the immediacy of present tense?  That's okay.  Because after you've logged your fifty thousand words and won your NaNoWriMo t-shirt, you can add them in revision.  It will require close reading of your manuscript.  But you'll have time for that after NaNoWriMo is over.  For now, though, lose the shackles.