Showing posts with label The Gates of Shaizar. Show all posts
Showing posts with label The Gates of Shaizar. Show all posts

Friday, November 10, 2017

In search of lost friends – a story of barbarous adventure

As I promised a couple of months ago, I will occasionally share some of my older shorter stories. “The Gates of Shaizar” is an adventure story first published in 2010 in Pulp Empire, vol. 2, which is now out of print. It was republished in 2012 at the ezine Abandoned Towers, which has also now disappeared. I recently found two copies of Pulp Empire, vol. 2, on Amazon for $56 each, but you can read a story from that volume here, for free!

Oh, a few last words before the story: Shaizar is (or was) a real place, an ancient Syrian town that became a fortress in the medieval period before being abandoned after repeated devastation by earthquakes. The illustration for this post is taken from a photograph of the ruins which serves as a frontispiece to Philip K. Hitti's 1929 translation of a memoir of the medieval period.

Shaizar in ruins
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THE GATES OF SHAIZAR

When the order to halt came, al-Mastoub reined in his bay before the guards at the eastern gate of Shaizar. Behind him, the queue of merchants with ox carts and camels, the woodcutters leading laden donkeys; the governor’s concubines in curtained palanquins; the flocks of bleating sheep and goats; the slaves, pilgrims, and riff-raff of the province backed up outside the iron-studded eastern gate of the city.

The gaze of the guards’ lieutenant traveled over al-Mastoub’s cast-off clothing, the tall warhorse, the sword, pulled although the lieutenant couldn’t know, from the Varangian Leofric’s stiffening hand. A good horse and weapons, but only a leather cap and quilted jerkin for armor. Al-Mastoub could see the lieutenant’s suspicions reflected on the man’s face.

“Sir,” al-Mastoub said, “I have a passport from the magistrate Haroun ibn Ibrahim of al-Shara.” He held the now-tattered safe conduct he’d forged before his chest, like a shield. And he prayed silently, as he had at every checkpoint, that the man wouldn’t know Haroun’s signature.

The lieutenant ran a hand over his beard. The document’s elaborate calligraphy, al-Mastoub knew, was almost indecipherable. He’d added every flourish possible to dissuade anyone he encountered from giving more than a cursory glance at his credentials. But as a corner of al-Mastoub’s mouth twitched, the lieutenant’s hand clamped on the passport.

“No one enters until I’ve examined this man’s papers. Thoroughly.”

The guards stationed themselves before the crowd shoving to enter the opened gate. The sun rose high over the town’s walls in the late summer sky. The crowd behind al-Mastoub grew more clamorous as the lieutenant read the passport, muttering each word aloud.

Al-Mastoub loosened the fidgeting bay’s reins. He fumbled for the pouch under his shirt that held his small horde of treasure -– the papers of his manumission, Leofric’s medusa-headed ring, the last handful of stolen dinars.

The lieutenant’s eye caught the movement. “You!  Keep your hands in sight.”

“It’s a hot day, sir. Perhaps you’d like something to slake your thirst?”

“In sight!”

Al-Mastoub shrugged. If the passport failed, at least he had the sword. He wished he had Haroun’s practical scimitar. Leofric’s sword was almost too long for him to wield one-handed. But he hadn’t dared steal another weapon. Roaming through Syria with a forged passport was enough to get him beheaded without having Haroun on his trail.

Itinerant jugglers, beggars, and pickpockets plied their trades among the crowd. Sellers of wine, fruit juice and sweetmeats counted themselves blessed.

“I’ve got eight for the head,” a singsong voice chanted just beyond the gates. “Do I hear any more?”

“Put me in for the head.” One of the guards pulled a copper dirham out of his sash.

“A small bet at short odds,” the bookmaker sneered. “You might do better to wager on nose and ears.”

“I’m for nose and ears,” another man shouted.

“Aren’t you going to give odds which gate he hangs at?” A man with eyebrows that met across his forehead pushed as close as the troopers would allow. Al-Mastoub cursed him under his breath.

“It would just be taking your money,” the bookmaker said. “Whatever part of him the lieutenant decides to hack off will hang here on the front gate for all to see.”

“I want to place a bet,” al-Mastoub said.

The bookmaker stared. “Show me your money.”

Again, al-Mastoub eased a hand under his shirt.

“In plain view!” the lieutenant said.

Al-Mastoub withdrew his hand.

“No money, no bet,” the bookmaker said.

“Silence!” The lieutenant looked up at last. “This mentions two companions,” he said.

“They were taken prisoner.” Al-Mastoub shifted his damp hands from the saddlebow. “I’m here to ransom them.”

The lieutenant flung the passport at him in disgust. “Then do so. And leave quickly.”

Al-Mastoub joined the travelers surging toward the marketplace. He scanned the merchandise.  At the point in the line where Jehan and Robert had been chained, there now stood only a gawky girl with big feet. There was no sign of either of the captured soldiers. No Jehan, no Robert.

The old slave trader, Abu al-Darda, hailed him, walking around al-Mastoub’s tall bay. “Ain’t you come up in the world since the last time we met? If I knew you was this good a horse thief, I’d have charged that judge more for you.”

“I had two friends in this caravan.  I’m able to redeem them now. Or if you remember where you sold them. . .” Al-Mastoub pulled a gold piece out of his pouch and flipped it.

Abu al-Darda moved closer. Al-Mastoub folded his fist around the coin.

Wednesday, February 16, 2011

The Lemon Tree

People ask whether I paper my walls with rejection slips.  Sometimes I explain that in the twenty-first century most story rejections come by e-mail.  Sometimes I just smile.  But even though they’re not on paper, those rejections live on – in my submissions results folder.  You could think of it as a lemon folder but I think it of as folder full of seeds, with the potential to grow.

My advice last week was to know your markets.  Today’s advice – never diss an editor.  My editors, especially of e-zines, have often provided helpful comments that kept hope alive and pointed the way to making a story saleable.  I’ll share a couple of examples from my folder to show how an editor’s comments helped turn a story from a reject to a winner.

I had the pleasure last fall of talking to Adrian Simmons, an editor at one of my favorite on-line magazines, Heroic Fantasy Quarterly.  Adrian and I were workshop participants at FenCon in Dallas and I thanked him for his critique of “Shaman,” my previous short story submission to HFQ.  His response to the submission had been – “I like the setting and the characters but. . . try us with something a little less convoluted.”  By taking his comment to heart, I was able to eliminate the overly complex passages and sell it to Short-Story.me.  You can still see there.  Take a look.  With enough looks, it may get into their next anthology and earn some more money.  And, yeah, I’ve submitted another story to HFQ.  Will it sell?  At least I can hope for quality feedback.

“The Gates of Shaizar,” like “Shaman,” suffered from the handicap of being based on characters and incidents from a still unsold novel.  The fictional equivalent of the plea “but it really happened that way” is “but I really wrote it that way.”  Just because you wrote a novel a particular way doesn’t mean it’s going to translate into a short story in the same way.  In the initial response to “Gates,” Rob Santa of Ricasso Press wrote, “What bothered me, I suspect, about this piece is the non-linear way the story was told.”  When I looked at the story in light of that comment, I saw that I had been too fixated on a historically accurate way of dating its flashback scene.  After all, I’d spent a lot of time researching dates.  But changing from an A.D. date to the simple statement “Two months earlier” before the flashback scene resulted in a sale to the Pulp Empire Volume Two anthology.  You can buy the Pulp Empire volume at Amazon and see what I mean.  Please do -- I get a percentage of the royalties.  A little fertilizer for the lemon tree.

(I found all the markets mentioned in this article through www.duotrope.com/  Next week, why I subscribe to market listings besides Duotrope.)